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x_los ([personal profile] x_los) wrote in [community profile] dankodes 2023-05-01 09:29 pm (UTC)

Chapter 10, EN

The way these successive paragraphs of dialogue use quotation marks isn't necessarily technically wrong, but it’s very awkward: maybe a custom to honour in the breach.

“-yanked the steering wheel around!” I don't know that that you can use an exclamation point in uninflected narration like this? It happens both here and in the succeeding sentence.

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