Little Mushroom: Chapters 10 - 12 (EN) or 21 - 24 (CH)

[x_los]

Welcome to Week 4's "Little Mushroom" (小蘑菇) discussion for English chapters 10 - 12 of Book 1 and Chinese chapters 21 - 24 (inclusive). This spreadsheet contains the schedule and concordances of the chapter endings across the Chinese and English versions. There's an associated Discord server (ask superborb for an invite if you'd like one), and we'll be running comment posts here.

This discussion will wrap up and next week's will begin on May 8th.

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SPOILER POLICY: I personally don't give a fuck or even like to give unearned credence to the concept, so since I'm writing the post, anything's fair game.

Comments

Chapter 10, EN

[x_los]

The way these successive paragraphs of dialogue use quotation marks isn't necessarily technically wrong, but it’s very awkward: maybe a custom to honour in the breach.

“-yanked the steering wheel around!” I don't know that that you can use an exclamation point in uninflected narration like this? It happens both here and in the succeeding sentence.